Yorick
Yorick
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songs in the works 4

just one of these days.
i just might have a story
full of tales and adventure
what a life i lived.

could be the coming up
a kid without a knowing
all these cries and wonder
did i even know better

then time flies
too fast for this fools mind
a teenage life so fine
one led to another.

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last online: 05/14, 23:04
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Great.
Keep up the creative flow

Yorick
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song edit

just when its
one of these days.
i just might
have this story
full of tales and adventure
what a life i lived.
fun and all.

when it stopped..
i had to think back a two
coulda been the coming up
a kid without a knowing
how did i get screwed
all these cries and wonder
did i even know better

then time ...
flies

too fast for this fools mind
a teenage life is so fine
one thing led to another.
before i realized.

meh .. chorus in the works

Yorick
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hmm revisited my edit.. i think it sounds worse.. thoughts?

Inbound1896536404
last online: 05/14, 23:04
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Im an old ancient fossil. What do I know

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well some criticism would be a kind of constructive feedback eh

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